Micro Invasion

[FitLord]

This is a comic I threw together a year or two ago, this is what some people are into, it involves shrunken people interacting with normal sized women.

[RedSpeedo]

Too much text. And too didactic of a style. Do we need to know that relocating them to the prison planet was more cost effective than an other solution? It adds absolutely nothing but boring text to the story. You should make the aliens give the backstory through the dialog and let the reader piece the puzzle, like through two mini-humans talking for example:

- And can you tell me why the hell we ended up on this goddamned planet? Didn’t Governor Trumbull plan to relocate us to the Colony?
- Dude, Trumbull is a pushover. You know how cheap the Space Ministry is. They wanted to save a couple of zulecks.

Boom! This way, you introduced a weak governor, a Colony that seems a better place than the prison planet, a cheapo and possibly corrupt administration, a fictitious currency...

Storytelling brah. I thought you wrote for In Living Color.

[FitLord]

Too much text. And too didactic of a style. Do we need to know that relocating them to the prison planet was more cost effective than an other solution? It adds absolutely nothing but boring text to the story. You should make the aliens give the backstory through the dialog and let the reader piece the puzzle, like through two mini-humans talking for example:

- And can you tell me why the hell we ended up on this goddamned planet? Didn’t Governor Trumbull plan to relocate us to the Colony?
- Dude, Trumbull is a pushover. You know how cheap the Space Ministry is. They wanted to save a couple of zulecks.

Boom! This way, you introduced a weak governor, a Colony that seems a better place than the prison planet, a cheapo and possibly corrupt administration, a fictitious currency...

Storytelling brah. I thought you wrote for In Living Color.

Thanks for your critique, when I do the final draft, I’ll take into account your advice. I plan on making this into a novel, then draw a comic book version of it. I agree that there is too much text in this version.

[connu mcgregu]

Too much text. And too didactic of a style. Do we need to know that relocating them to the prison planet was more cost effective than an other solution? It adds absolutely nothing but boring text to the story. You should make the aliens give the backstory through the dialog and let the reader piece the puzzle, like through two mini-humans talking for example:

- And can you tell me why the hell we ended up on this goddamned planet? Didn’t Governor Trumbull plan to relocate us to the Colony?
- Dude, Trumbull is a pushover. You know how cheap the Space Ministry is. They wanted to save a couple of zulecks.

Boom! This way, you introduced a weak governor, a Colony that seems a better place than the prison planet, a cheapo and possibly corrupt administration, a fictitious currency...

Storytelling brah. I thought you wrote for In Living Color.

Really need to keep you in my counsel when I make it (srs)

[RedSpeedo]

Really need to keep you in my counsel when I make it (srs)

We?re all gonna make it, brah.

[Deep Purple]

Too much text. And too didactic of a style. Do we need to know that relocating them to the prison planet was more cost effective than an other solution? It adds absolutely nothing but boring text to the story. You should make the aliens give the backstory through the dialog and let the reader piece the puzzle, like through two mini-humans talking for example:

- And can you tell me why the hell we ended up on this goddamned planet? Didn’t Governor Trumbull plan to relocate us to the Colony?
- Dude, Trumbull is a pushover. You know how cheap the Space Ministry is. They wanted to save a couple of zulecks.

Boom! This way, you introduced a weak governor, a Colony that seems a better place than the prison planet, a cheapo and possibly corrupt administration, a fictitious currency...

Storytelling brah. I thought you wrote for In Living Color.

Nice to see feedback like that opposed to people just saying “Didn’t read” etc.

[Janoy Cresva]

am I wrong to assume the person that wrote this has a slight foot fetish? If I had to go further I would guess they like being humiliated by women(the women hurting him then trying to protect it and take it to hospital).. plus the other one saying she wont "catch a charge" unless she kills one. This is actually very funny. Not sure whether you meant it to be OP. Either way 8/10 thread. Would read again

[FitLord]

am I wrong to assume the person that wrote this has a slight foot fetish? If I had to go further I would guess they like being humiliated by women(the women hurting him then trying to protect it and take it to hospital).. plus the other one saying she wont "catch a charge" unless she kills one. This is actually very funny. Not sure whether you meant it to be OP. Either way 8/10 thread. Would read again

I don’t have a foot fetish, but this was made to appeal to guys who do. I’m into getting shrunk and dominated by hot chicks

[Janoy Cresva]

I don’t have a foot fetish, but this was made to appeal to guys who do. I’m into getting shrunk and dominated by hot chicks

[martin shkreli]

[martin shkreli]

I don’t have a foot fetish, but this was made to appeal to guys who do. I’m into getting shrunk and dominated by hot chicks

[Giga Pajeet]

Nice to see feedback like that opposed to people just saying “Didn’t read” etc.

But i didn't i just looked at the pictures

[martin shkreli]

But i didn't i just looked at the pictures

what did you think of the comic mr. pajeet ?

['snot that bad]

@FitLord do you have any more scanned comics?

[FitLord]

@FitLord do you have any more scanned comics?

Someone else wrote the script for this and I drew it, but I can’t remember what order the pages go in.